Last sentence: 'earning their creators...' should be 'its creators'. and 'our intended landing point' should be its intended landing point.
Also, you might want to consider whether the last sentence borders on being a run-on, and whether breaking it into two sentences might not enhance readability.
By increasing productivity, and working in a stress-free zone are two great factors. Creating an environment that is stress-free with employees who work well together shows the point of view as to a healthy work area as well as healthy employees
basically by selling the relationship of their employees
In the essay Benjamin Franklin wrote in 1784 about Native Americans, titled “Remarks Concerning the Savages of North America”, he stated that the Native Americans were called savages “because their manners differ from ours, which we think the perfection of civility; they think the same of theirs.” The theme of empathy is seen in Franklin’s essay, as he encouraged seeing the other person’s point of view in dealing with the Native Americans. In highlighting the similarity of how Native Americans conduct their public councils to how order is maintained in the British House of Commons, he promoted the value of respect for diversity.
I believe the missing excerpt is from Midsummer by Derek
Walcott, which is as follows:
With the stampeding hiss and scurry of green lemmings,
midsummer's leaves race to extinction like the roar
of a Brixton riot tunneled by water hoses;
they seethe toward autumn's fire—it is in their nature,
being men as well as leaves, to die for the sun.
So, based on the excerpt, the speaker thinks that the
riot was somewhat inevitable.
To add, Midsummer is a sequence of 54 lyrics that record one
year's passing in the poet's life from summer to summer.
B. It inserts the reader into a state of wanting more, and it leaves them in suspense, like a cliffhanger in a television show.
Hope this helps!
