I am dissatisfied with the service I received.
This is the better revision because the word choice is more specific to the topic of the letter. Also, the more professional tone distances herself from the manager and gives more her more authority. The original sentence sounds too informal. This would be problematic because the audience of the letter may see the author as whiny and complaining instead of a person who should be taken seriously and worth listening to.
As you may know, the use of pathos is an appeal to emotion
that mainly tugs on the heart strings in order to have readers/audience members
feel sorry for the writer/speaker so that they may be more easily
persuaded. That said, the line of the
speech that seems to do this the most strongly is the first line: “Friends and fellow citizens: I stand before you tonight under indictment
for the alleged crime of having voted at the last presidential election,
without having a lawful right to vote.”
To state that a person is before you who is indicted can certainly lend
to the possibility of feeling sorry for them.
Perhaps take from my answer. Sorry if this isn't good, i'm a bit tired. You can add on and change up the words. I was unsure what was exactly wanted for this.
Answer:
Hello, as the speaker of this, I say the motion is correct. Modern movies are run by acting and scripts, while people are off script and anything could truly happen. Younger people tend to leach from what they see on T.V. and from elders, thus certain movies may give them bad views. Say with common action movies: That would most likely give the person a taste of violence as an answer. Humans can be violent, but are not always fighting like how thrillers and action movies show. People do break out into fights, just not like that. If someone was trying to figure out how some commonly interact and behave from a movie, it wouldn't be a good choice, since that would provide the wrong view. Unless it's a documentary or educational film, modern movies do indeed give a bad model. It is understandable for others to have different opinions on this matter, this is my own. Thank you for your time.
Adjective ? Since it’s describing a noun!
