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Answer:
Love Thy Garden
Most of us associate gardening with our <u>grandparents</u>, with <u>people recovering </u>from an illness, or <u>with older folks</u> gently tending to rows of hydrangeas and tomatoes. <u>Of course,</u> it is not something <u>young </u>people do, right? <u>However</u>, an increasing number of young adults and kids are getting into small-scale farming or gardening. <u>This happens because</u> schools across the country have initiated programs that involve working <u>not only in gardens but also in small community farms.</u> <u>For example,</u> The Edible Schoolyard Project, <u>which was created in 2005 by Alice waters,</u> makes farming fun for young people. <u>In the beginning,</u> Alice wanted to transform a vacant lot into an edible kitchen in her neighborhood school. <u>After 2005</u>, the project blossomed into a nationwide campaign to involve kids in the food-growing and production process. The program lets school kids of varying ages grow <u>their </u>fruits and vegetables. <u>Then</u>, it teaches them interesting and simple recipes. <u>Can you imagine the joy kids experience in every stage when growing their food? First</u>, they plant the seed. <u>Then</u>, they watch the plant grow <u>as </u>they take care of it. <u>Finally</u>, they pick the fruits and eat them. <u>Besides</u>, farming has other benefits<u>:</u> it relieves stress and it helps kids stay fit and connect with the community. Gardening or farming can <u>also </u>be fun for adults and teenagers. <u>Thus</u>, people of all ages can enjoy it.
Explanation
- Grandparents: unification of the concept grandpas and grandmas to get a shorter sentence.
- Sentence 1: Since the first three sentences are closely related, the text flows better by linking them. The repetition of the preposition "with" gives the text a poetical aspect.
- people recovering from an illness/with older folks gently tending to rows of hydrangeas and tomatoes: omission of the expressions "who are"/"We have seen" to make the sentence shorter.
- Of course: to emphasize the claim.
- Young people instead of younger because there is not a comparison between two elements in the same sentence.
- It is not instead of it isn´t since it should be formal as it may be an academic text.
- However: connector to show an opposition between two ideas.
- This happens because: phrase to link the cause and the effect.
- not only in gardens but also in small community farms: not only but also to show addition.
- For example: to introduce an instance of the previous idea.
- , which was created in 2005 by Alice waters, : use of a relative clause to characterize the previous pronoun.
- In the beginning/ After 2005: connectors to show the before and after of the project.
- neighborhood school instead of a school in her neighborhood to make the sentence less complex.
- The omission of "own" because it is redundant.
- Then: connector of time to show that the idea follows the food-growing process.
- as: to show simoultaneous ideas
- Can you imagine the joy kids experience in every stage when growing their food?: use of a question to invite the reader to think and make him/her feel part of the text.
- First/then/finally: connectors to show the chronological order of processes.
- Besides: to add a new idea
- use of colon: to introduce a list of equal elements
- also: to show the idea of addition, inclusion
- Thus: connector to show a consequence of the previous statement
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