Question

Select the correct text in the passage. Which sentence in the passage should be revised for wordiness? You have probably heard someone say that breakfast is the most important meal of the day. This statement is true. Liz Fairfield reports in Perfect Health magazine, "Breakfast helps your body to get going so that you have plenty of energy to start the day.” However, researchers warn against starting the day with foods that are high in calories, sugar, and fat. In other words, eating a piece of toast, either plain, with butter, or with peanut butter and with a side of fresh fruit, such as a banana, a plum, or an apple, for breakfast is better than eating doughnuts, candy, or ice cream. Not eating a healthy breakfast can cause iron deficiency, which can cause a person to have a high body mass index (BMI) and lead to obesity.

Answer 1

The correct answer is "In other words, eating a piece of toast, either plain, with butter, or with peanut butter and with a side of fresh fruit, such as a banana, a plum, or an apple, for breakfast is better than eating doughnuts, candy, or ice cream".

Explanation:

Wordiness occurs if a text has more words than necessary, which means the author uses words or details that are redundant or not essential to understand the main idea. This distracts the readers from the main point and makes the text more difficult to be read.

In the excerpt presented, wordiness occurs in "In other words..." because the author added too many unnecessary examples and these do not contribute to the main idea. Instead, the author should revise this sentence as "In other words, eating a piece of toast with a side of fresh fruit for breakfast is better than eating doughnuts, candy, or ice cream". You can also identify this sentence contains wordiness because it only conveys one idea but it is longer than any other sentence, which means it contains unnecessary details and words.

Answer 2

In other words, eating a piece of toast, either plain, with butter, or with peanut butter and with a side of fresh fruit, such as a banana, a plum, or an apple, for breakfast is better than eating doughnuts, this sentence is too wordy