Question

Read the essay "Love Thy Garden." Then rewrite the essay to improve the flow between sentences as well as between the paragraphs by inserting transitional words. For instance, if sentences have a chronological or logical connection that is not clearly expressed in the text, transitional words and phrases will help you establish their connection.Check if the word or phrase you have chosen is the best choice in the given context. Ask yourself why you think it fits best. For example, if two sentences present contrasting ideas, would you use the word but, or would you rather use the word however to connect them? Which factor determined your choice of word? Explain your reasons for each transitional word or phrase you insert in the given passage.Love Thy GardenMost of us associate gardening with our grandmas and grandpas. We associate it with people who are recovering from an illness. We have seen our older folks gently tending to rows of hydrangeas or tomatoes. It just isn’t something younger people are supposed to do, right? The truth is an increasing number of young adults and kids are getting into small-scale farming or gardening. Schools across the country have initiated programs that involve working in gardens or small community farms.The Edible Schoolyard Project helps make farming fun for young folks. The project was started in 2005 by Alice Waters. She wanted to transform a vacant lot into an edible kitchen in a school in her neighborhood. It blossomed after 2005 into a nationwide campaign to involve kids in the food-growing and production process. The program lets school kids of varying ages grow their own fruits and vegetables. It then teaches them interesting recipes that are simple too. Imagine the joy kids experience in the different stages of growing their own food. They plant the seed. They watch the plant grow. They take care of it. They pick its fruit and eat it. Farming has other benefits. It relieves stress. It helps kids to stay fit. It lets kids connect with the community. Gardening or farming can be fun for adults and teenagers. People of all ages can enjoy it.

Answer 1

Love Thy Garden

Most of us associate gardening with our grandmas and grandpas. Similarly, we associate it with people who are recovering from an illness. We have seen our older generations gently tending to rows of hydrangeas or tomatoes. Gardening, however, isn’t supposed to be something younger people do, right? The truth is that an increasing number of young adults and kids are getting into small-scale farming or gardening. As a result, schools across the country have initiated programs that involve working in gardens or small community farms.

One notable community farm that makes farming fun is the Edible Schoolyard Project. Geared toward young adults, the project was started in 2005 by Alice Waters. She wanted to transform a vacant lot into an edible kitchen in a school in her neighborhood. As a result of Alice’s hard work, it blossomed into a nationwide campaign to involve kids in the food-growing and production process. The program lets school kids of varying ages grow their own fruits and vegetables. It then teaches them interesting recipes that are simple to follow and prepare. Imagine the joy kids experience in the different stages of growing their own food. First, they plant the seed and start to watch the plant grow. Next, they take care of it each day. Finally, they are able to pick its fruit and enjoy! Farming has other benefits as well. It relieves stress and promotes activity, helping kids stay fit. Additionally, it lets kids connect with the community. Gardening or farming can be fun for adults and teenagers. As you have read, people of all ages can enjoy it.

Similarly—used to show a comparison of two things

Gardening, however—used to show contrast

As a result—used to show an effect

One notable community farm—used to show an example or cause that will soon have an effect

As a result of Alice’s hard work—used to show an effect

It then—used to show an effect over time

First/ Next/ Finally—used to show chronological order

as well/Additionally—used to show that more was going to be added to what was already said

As you have read—used to signal a concluding sentence

Answer 2

Answer:

Love Thy Garden

Most of us associate gardening with our grandparents, with people recovering from an illness, or with older folks gently tending to rows of hydrangeas and tomatoes. Of course, it is not something young people do, right? However, an increasing number of young adults and kids are getting into small-scale farming or gardening. This happens because schools across the country have initiated programs that involve working not only in gardens but also in small community farms. For example, The Edible Schoolyard Project, which was created in 2005 by Alice waters, makes farming fun for young people. In the beginning, Alice wanted to transform a vacant lot into an edible kitchen in her neighborhood school. After 2005, the project blossomed into a nationwide campaign to involve kids in the food-growing and production process. The program lets school kids of varying ages grow their fruits and vegetables. Then, it teaches them interesting and simple recipes. Can you imagine the joy kids experience in every stage when growing their food? First, they plant the seed. Then, they watch the plant grow as they take care of it. Finally, they pick the fruits and eat them. Besides, farming has other benefits: it relieves stress and it helps kids stay fit and connect with the community. Gardening or farming can also be fun for adults and teenagers. Thus, people of all ages can enjoy it.

Explanation

• Grandparents: unification of the concept grandpas and grandmas to get a shorter sentence.
• Sentence 1: Since the first three sentences are closely related, the text flows better by linking them. The repetition of the preposition "with" gives the text a poetical aspect.
• people recovering from an illness/with older folks gently tending to rows of hydrangeas and tomatoes: omission of the expressions "who are"/"We have seen" to make the sentence shorter.
• Of course: to emphasize the claim.
• Young people instead of younger because there is not a comparison between two elements in the same sentence.
• It is not instead of it isn´t since it should be formal as it may be an academic text.
• However: connector to show an opposition between two ideas.
• This happens because: phrase to link the cause and the effect.
• not only in gardens but also in small community farms: not only but also to show addition.
• For example: to introduce an instance of the previous idea.
• , which was created in 2005 by Alice waters, : use of a relative clause to characterize the previous pronoun.
• In the beginning/ After 2005: connectors to show the before and after of the project.
• neighborhood school instead of a school in her neighborhood to make the sentence less complex.
• The omission of "own" because it is redundant.
• Then: connector of time to show that the idea follows the food-growing process.
• as: to show simoultaneous ideas
• Can you imagine the joy kids experience in every stage when growing their food?: use of a question to invite the reader to think and make him/her feel part of the text.
• First/then/finally: connectors to show the chronological order of processes.
• Besides: to add a new idea
• use of colon: to introduce a list of equal elements
• also: to show the idea of addition, inclusion
• Thus: connector to show a consequence of the previous statement