The revision which would most improve sentence 7 is the one that follows:
Suggest an alternative plan to replace the current school calendar. Explain why it is outdated and inefficient. Express an opinion about those who oppose changing it. Restate the strongest piece of evidence used to support the claim.
Comments: The paragraph above contains instructions for a school assignment or something like that. Since there were instructions, it was necessary to change the verbs from "ing" form to imperative (used to give orders, commands,instructions). Punctuation had to be changed as well: a few pauses were added, and that was done with periods (.). In order to make it less repetitive, it was the right choice to replace "the current school calendar" with the pronoun "it" (third person singular) from the second time we talked about "the current school calendar" on.
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Answer: Colin's evidence is not relevant to his claim<u> because it is about flying drones being a sport, not about privacy issues.</u>
Explanation: Colin's evidence is not related to his main claim, that is to say the assertion that drones do not invade people's privacy<u>. Instead of focusing on providing evidence that supports the idea that drones do not affect people's privacy negatively, Colin offers evidence related to the thought that flying drones is a sport </u>by stating that coordination and technical skills are necessary to fly drones. Therefore, it can be said that his argument lacks strength because it has not been properly supported.